WALT: Describe a moment in time in detail.
I heard the crowd cheering my name. I ran as fast as i could, I did not stop or they would catch up.
I tried around they were right behind me, I ran as fast as a cheater about to pounce I won Gold.
Yayaya! They cheered my name, I felt proud. I wonder with my Mum and Dad watch me and I also wonder were my friends watching me. by Rhys
Hi Rhys I really like the simile I pounced over the line and got gold.
ReplyDeleteNext time you could put spaces for yay yay yay.
hi Rhys I like the way you had a photo of us Usain bolt next step yous capital letter for I
ReplyDeleteHi Rhys
ReplyDeleteI like how use similes
To be BTB instead of I did not stop or they would catch up
I did not stop because the other runners would catch up
by Antonia
Hi Rhys I like how have a awesome introduction next time you could tell us a bit more about what you were wondering
ReplyDeleteHi Rhys a good easy story that is awesome I really liked the simile you put in your work. To be BTB try to prof read your work.
ReplyDeleteHi, Rhys
ReplyDeleteYour writing is great.
Next time Remember to put I as a capital.